The flood in Çakırlar where is the district of Antalya was the most terrifying and unforgettable event I kept in my mind since it was occured.
It was a rainy and stormy December morning,I was at home then I turned the TV.I heard some awful news.Storms and heavy rain paralayzed daily life in Antalya and also they resulted in the death of eight people.
In Çakırlar which is situated between mountains,was the most damaged place in Antalya.Many houses were flooded, bridges were collapsed and the electricity wires were fallen down onto streets,so homes were remained n darkness for long periods.Many people were unable to leave their homes they were waiting help desperately.They were really frightened. Goventment sent vehicles to rescue people and volunteers help them,too.Vehicles were barely taking people from their home,because flood hindered to them.Scarcely bulldozer took a boy when it fell down.Unfortunately,the boy and driver died. At that time,I heard the irritating and painful screams from residents.It was so unbearable voice I had ever heard.
Finally,after a day storm abated.However exhausted they were,they started to search their relatives or nighbours and their possessions eleborately.They suffered from adversely.Flood undermined their homes and dreams.Ofcourse it was an enviromental event,however people could take precaution for disasters.
Written by: Ezgi Yavuz
hi ezgi:)how are u?how is it going?ı really miss all of u:)ı am looking forward to seeing u.ı have checked your writing and found some mistakes.ı am sure when u write it on a paper u know how to designe it.but anyway in ur writing here ı see that
ReplyDelete1)your writing should consists of three paragraph.
2)as ı remember you should mention about your parents feelings.
3)ı find your conclusion paragraph a bit short.you should add some sentences to make the ending clear.
4)in your body paragraph, you divided subject and verb with a comma.however,it's not correct you cant seperate them.
5)in general,you mentioned about the event directly but ı reckon that you should tell the event bye means of the feelings.